Creative+Writing

The Castle

Closely look at the photgraph above. Your task is to write a beginning to a story (opening paragraph 4 - 5 sentences only). You need to incluude:1) a variety of connectives - To learn some more about connectives and conjunctions click [|here]

2) At least one simile or metaphor, for some eaxmples click [|here]

Lastly these are the minefield words for this piece of writing - "got, went and said"As a beginning point you may want to think of what you would hear, smell, see and what you may be feeling if you were standing here.Good Luck!

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... Paragraph Leila Zahraa It feels really good looking at this beautiful photo !so nice and relaxing ! As I was walking across this very lonfg and big bridge, I felt so relaxed and peaceful ! as i was thinking of that i was halfway across the bridge so fast! I sstared for a while and cant wait to find whats inside this casle. It like calling for me to go and walk in there ! Like a shining, glowing place that you would like to stay in for a very long while thinking of the past and memorys ...I feel like there are angels inside that ar shining as the sun, and calling me more and more in... I took a step closer and closer but after a while a fog coverd my eyes ! I could feel it that something would happen but something that maybe scary or maybe peaceful but who knows ....Zahara'a || I I'm walking down the old creaking bridge, I'm starting to see the misty castle through the foggy cold weather, I should have came with someone but I don't want anyone to find out about me.I'm scared now, I'm getting very close to the castle and even worse I can hear the witch's crow flying near me.No one in town would dare to come to this horrid place since anything could happen here. I'm here to ask the evil witch to free my younger sister, Elena. She got captured by the evil witch's slaves while she was playing along the bridge with her friend, luckily her friend escaped so she didn't get captured...they should have not came here in the first place. || "How dare you come here...." || inside ||
 * First Name || Paragraph ||
 * Leila || There was once a spooky castle with a ghost named spooks in it. There were people standing infront of the castle,well said one of them lets enter.As the entered there was a noise OoOoOoOoOo said spooks.Ahhhhhhh said one of them SHHHH said the other there might be someone tricking us.Oh yeah he said then he yelled WHEN I SEE YOU.........SHHHHHHH said the others.Oops he said, i just wanted him to show himself thats all.You can do that later he said.Ok he said and they continued walking. They started going upstairs each of the stairs creeked they were all scared.When they finished the last step they saw all the rooms they were full of spider webs.The others were looking at the rooms except for one of them he saw spooks the GHOST .Ahhhhhhhhhhhh he yelled and ran across the room. The others came and said whats wrong.G G G GHOST!!!!!!! ||
 * Zahara'a || **Creative Writing** edited
 * Mutwakil || In the darkest cease there a the mane scarey thing that happen if you step on the blog bridge the bridge will make a cracking sound to get past you have to run across the bridge and if you get close enough you will see ghost gowning arena the the cease you will here the strong wind blowing past you every minuet if you fouler in the ceiling water ||
 * Michael ||  ||
 * Jakob ||  ||
 * Alistair || In the deep dark shadows there once stood a castle. which was abandoned until now.As i entered the mysteroius castle,i felt a cold breezed hitting my face as it was traveling down my spine and making me feel that i was in coma, as i was walking i knew there was someone or something lurking in the dark, after a while i saw picture frames floating in thin air, i thought i was hallucinating as i touched one, it stared ||
 * Yu Long || Once,there was a spooky looking castle that will make you extremely scared. The unwelcoming castle give out a scary scent that will makes you faint.The old looking and mind boggling castle looks more like a haunted castle.The man walked infront of spooky castle and try to ||
 * Muna || While I walked up to the castle I realised that the oldbridge I was about to walk onto looked as old as my grandma(which is 93).I began to worry about approaching an abandoned castle that looked like it was around in the time of the dinosaurs.I immediately looked up to the sky and realised that it was so foggy that I thought that for a second that I was in the clouds.It was so dark and foggy that I decided to run as fast as the speed of light.I then felt a presence behind me.I then turned around and saw that there was an evil vampire with blood dripping from his fangs. ||
 * Ramanjot || As I was walking across the long and the very old bridge ,I felt eyes upon me. The bridge creaked at every step I took (it seems for ages, I thought). The next thing I knew was I was halfway across the bridge already! I stared to feel scared but I was so much desprete to find what was inside the castle.I took a step and the bridge creaked madly after awhile fog started covering my eyes, something was going to happen I could feel it, but something really dangerous! ||
 * Chelsea || While I was slowly walking against the foggy and misty weather on the creaky and rustic bridge, a glimpse of a castle appeared. It ended up being the giant antique castle I have been looking for. My sister, Unity was waiting for me outside the far away meadows. The timing midnight arrived, navy blue mixed with black overhead areas, it was as dark as a panda's black eye. NOT A SINGLE BIT OF LIGHT SHONE EXCEPT FOR MY VERY OWN TORCH...... I had to admit I was very afraid at the same time, worried about Unity whether she was fine or not. I slowly told myself in my head that I had to do it, Unity was my only sister and person which cared about me, to save my sister Unity the only way was to harvest the magical flower at the back of the garden, I rapidly walked closer and closer to the castle................... ||
 * Jason || The blurring fog and the rickety bridge was all that stood between me and the ancient castle from which all generation and of the ‘Dafiers’ were born. The drunken bounty hunters stood furiously behind me waiting for my surrender but they should’ve known of the Dafiers mystical enchanted fog. I twisted and curved the fog with all my might strangling the drunken bounty hunters as I exclaimed “ye shall finally pay for the crimes ye committed back in the days”. Forcing my way to the castle where my ancient yet mystical family lived. The insects screamed greatly as they saw my return from my dangerous quest. ||
 * Leilani || In the 17th century knights, kings and queens lived in castles and palaces, but now in the 21st century there are only ruins of the amazing palaces. The walls look like they had been knocked down by catapults and wooden bridges makes horrible creaking noises just like a witch cackling. There is no colour anywhere to be found just pitch black in every corner. The moats ||
 * Nathaniel || One time, at an unknown place, a foggy castle stands on the Earth. The light of the sky shined down on this castle spookily. There was no one left on this castle but it once contained a powerfulowner, for this reason ||
 * Megan || As
 * Naomi || ... I see the gigantic castle in the distance. I slowly inch forward through the foggy mist, holding onto the hand rails of the creaking bridge. This seems as old as the mummies of Egypt. After walking for what it seemed like forever, I finally got to the towering castle . I wanted to walk through the door but I also had a hesitant feeling. closing my eyes tight, I took a step through the huge entrance. All around me, i see cobwebs with spiders in them. This ancient building seems even older than the bridge that I crossed before.Suddenly, I see a ghostly figure in the darkness as I walk further into the castle. The creepy figure is floating towards me. TURN AND RUN! My mind told me, but my body didn't move. The ghost whispered to me,
 * Anthony || It was a dark foggy castlle.i was standing on the bridge I thought to myself i should go and check it out.I got to the castle i saw a ghost i when i wanted to run away the bridge fell down.So i walked in the castle as soon as i wondered in i was pulled by somthing in there.it was a vampire i was so scared i ran and tried to touch a knife but the vampire beat me there he chased me to kill me.But his freind stoped him from killing me then i realized who it was.It was my freind that everyone thought went missing he was bit by a vampire so he made me a bed and i stayed there for the rest of my life THE ENd ||
 * Judith || The dark gloomy castle sat still in the cold winter wet day. The birdge was wet and sllipery, I was cold, my hair was soking wet. I walked across the bridge.. only to find myself lost I turned back but the fog was to thick I was lost for sure. I felt sick and scared, my arms were shaking because it was so cold outside. I walked towards the castle ,I had this strange felling that someone was wathching I was frozen to my head to my toes. The catsle door was open I walked in then I saw this figure.I ran back even though I could not see my way I knew that I would never see that figure again. ||
 * Sofia || hile I was strolling along the bridge i was was caught amongst a old rickety castle. It was curious to see the mist surrounding the castle on a cold winters morning. At this time a notice a dark shadow front watching as I approached the old building. It was a figer that was as dark as full moon at night.When i was running toward the building it appeared be a a soking like a old cranky witch. ||
 * Jansen || As I am walking through the old big bridge,I was thinking the castle is very big inside and very old. The weather is not quite good, because its a foggy weather. Sometimes when it was a foggy weather you can't see a little bit. I was so scared when I first step in he very old bridge,because I think it gonna broke. I think they build the castle last couple of years ago. The fog is starting toome in my eyes. I really feel it! When I go inside the castle it's very old and lots lots of webs in the wall. When I first saw the bridge and castle It's very cool and old. I think something is going to happen and it's scary and dangerous! ||
 * Wanita || While i was walking down a steep bridge it was cold and dark. Suddenly a misty castle appearded the waves were splashing it came up on the old and rusty bridge my feet started to get wet. As i was walking up to the castle i heard foot steps behind me i looked back and know one was there. When i started to get to closer i heard my husband calling out my name. My husband had been gone for a week and had never came home i've now found him. But i must creep in the misty castle ||
 * Rozhan || There once was a dark creepy castle it was as dark as a cave, the waves were splashing on my feet i was cold as a penguin. There i was standing in the middle of the bridge feeling scared and sick inside i couldn't find my way back. My hair felt like it was heavy and wet. Suddenly my eyes saw a fearess big gaint, right there i felt terrerfied and worried that i would be hurt. I was shaking and cold as the wet and winter day was here my body froze i stand still like a statue i gazed into the gaints eye and slowly walked away. When suddenly the bridge started shaking i ran and ran but the bridge kept on going and going i herd screams and shouts coming from different directions i didn't know where it came from i tryed find my way back home and tryed to get rid of things in my mind, screams and shouts were getting louder and louder i started to get s..s..scared, then as i was running something mysterious happend....... ||
 * Madison || On a cold, mois,t misty, foggy morning I stood looking at the dark gloomy old castle thinking about its history which made me shiver,all I could see was a pure white glossy fog,I could not smell a thing all I could hear was the waves gently splashing against the bridges legs. I also felt like old souls swooping around me and I swear I heard them whispering,I wanted to walk away but I could'nt it felt like there was something trying to keep me there. I managed to walk away as I walked away I had this feeling of sadness swept over me it urged me to go backIi did not let the feeling take over my body so I left and never came back. ||
 * Adya ||  ||
 * Charli || One cold and foggy night I stood on a long and wobbley bridge it was very scary.I was shaking,I saw a shadow emerging from the misty fog.It was very big and I was scared.I creped up to towards the shadow, I thought that it was going to capture me but ended up being the owners of the castle. they invited me in the castle,when I got in they offered me some food so I took it because I was very hungry because I ||
 * Jason || one time they was a dark castle a foggy day were dark man awatis out the door he asked his serveant bring me a sword they went
 * Anzeny ||  ||
 * Wilbert ||  ||
 * peter ||  ||
 * Bojana || As I approached the dark and gloomy building a cold shiver ran down my spine.The old rickety bridge swayed gently as a slight breeze rolled by.Thick,moist fog surrounded the historic castle.Nothing could be heard,there was no atmosphere, just an eerie silence.Something was lurking beneath the muddy water..... ||
 * Benjamin || \on a cold dark day i wait in the depths in the beast. A dark calstle lays apon the sea of darkness no ht apears in the castle the bridge cracks as put one foot forward waves cover my boots.I hear the sceaming of a little girl coming form the black water i push on not hesitated as the girl trys to pull me in to the trap. I hear the voice of my exwife calling my name.the castle is dead obody in sight am i dead or am i dreaming i start to look for suplies or anything to stay alive in the depths of this beast. !THIS MY STORY!! ||
 * Andrey ||  ||